Inverted Pyramid and Contest Story Rewrite

First Up Leads:
1. The "How lead", the "Why lead", and the "What lead".
2. These types of leads are better because they usually are the most important factors.

Now-Direct Quotes:
3. A direct quote is a quote that is linked to the paragraph that comed before the quote.
4. These quotes elaborate on the previous transition.
5. 'With the tight budget and tough economic times, I thought my Wi-Fi proposal was a pipe dream," she said. "I want to thank the donor for being so generous."
6. An attribution is where it explain who is saying the quote.
7. The attributions should be in the form noun then verb.

Transitions:
8. A transition is the sentence that links the paragraph together and holds the story together.
9. The three types of transitions are fact transitions, indirect quote transitions, and partial quote transitions.

Conclusion:
10.
.Are the most important and recent facts first?
.Is the story accurate?Are the sources identified fully?
.Are the paragraphs short?
.Is the sentence structure varied in the story?
.Is the story neat and double-spaced so that it is easy to read?
.Does your story flow? Did you use the transition/quote formula?
.Did you use active voice?
11.
.Editorializing- Keep your opinion out of the story.
.Using first and second person-Keep yourself out of the story. Common error: "our school"
.Messy handwriting, poor grammar and spelling.
.Paragraphs too long.
.Misspelling names in the story.
.Trying to use all of the information.



Contest Story Rewrite:

Due to the  amount of fights that have occurred at Bowie High School, AISD has hired the TCRT to help students solve disagreements through non-violent solutions. A lot of the staff are happy for the program and believe it will be beneficial."Students have to learn how to solve life's problems without violence," school principal Mr. Brown said. "This program will teach our students just that."
The Teen Conflict Resolution Team program will begin on March 23. Any student who is caught fighting on campus must complete a TCRT non-violence workshop, including normal disciplinary actions. Many students are unhappy about the establishment of the TCRT program.
"Now students will get suspended and be forced to attend this program," 10th grader Opal said. "That's just too much."
With the new TCRT program, the school is striving to cut down the number of fights that occur on campus."Bowie is an elite school," science teacher Mrs. Abby said. "We need our students behavior to match what our school is known for."